yyonline520 发表于 2023-10-5 19:04   全显示 1楼
首先感谢作者的辛勤付出，作为手枪文，文笔还是不错的；就是剧情推进的有点太快了。主角是校花，并且家里有钱，还有个男朋友，不可能被插入了后就喊主人的，况且她肯定被男友干过很多次了，对这方面肯定熟悉，不可能沦陷的那么快。希望作者在剧情推进、校花的脑回路上面合理一点，总之写的非常不错。


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