xingtiaoaaa 发表于 2023-10-1 00:36   全显示 1楼
女主叫小慧可以接受，一个绿奴叫大壮会不会太反讽了，而且也不太好代入角色，建议改成有名有姓的那种比较好一些。另外，作者写作风格我很喜欢，一上来就开宗明义点题，后续再慢慢拓展，最得分的是叫床声很好的引导读者想像。


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